Editing the Personal Statement - Phase Two (Part 4 of 6)

Edits from your mentors

You should feel really good about your essay at this point. It tells a story, shows your strengths, and tells the reader that you’re right for the program!

The next step is to send the essay to three people:

  • Trusted friend or family member
  • Mentor who is in healthcare
  • Professor or teacher who knows you well

A teacher is helpful in two ways, first they will also be writing your recommendation, so it’s beneficial if they’ve seen your essay. Second, they will know you as a student and be able to give you advice on how to adjust your essay to include your scholastic strengths and emphasize how a school would benefit by your enrollment. A mentor will be able to speak to your description of the career and why it suits you. They truly understand the job that you’re aiming to have, and will be able to give you a stamp of approval if you’ve communicated your fit for the job. Finally, include a friend/family member knows you; they will make sure your personality and character shine through.

Final Step

Once you have everyone’s input, make the final edits to incorporate their comments. Send this to a friend and tell them you only want them to read it for grammar and spelling issues. This way, you won’t have too many cooks in the kitchen, but can be confident you’re sending it off, error free. Once this is back, do a final aloud read to yourself, then press submit!